This is my first draft writing on our class assembly that we had on Friday 17th March. Our learning intention was to use adjectives and verbs in our writing. Please take a read of my writing and let me know how I can improve my writing.
Beginning
As my class and I walked in the hall we all felt butterflies in our stomach like we might throw up . We looked around the hall, the school was nowhere to be seen, but after 5 minutes they began rushing in just like they were huge big elephants. As they came closer it was more louder , but as soon as their foot touched the entrance to the hall they were quite like mice. All the classes were in Shreya and Ina said “Hello my name is Shreya and my is Ina” ( Just the basics) .
Suddenly a piece of music was playing (Celebration by Kool and The Gang) Paris and Simon were the two kids who lead the dance. Simon was like Michael Jackson when he was a little kid. Paris was Cara butler (she is a 90’s dancer.) Next Lorenzo ,Dorina, Chrislynn and I went up with a smile on our faces. Then Taylor’s group, then Sariah’s Group and then the rest of the Henderson class. We laughed, we smiled and some kids in Henderson class even forgot the moves a bit (I’m talking about me).
Ti Rauka and National anthem
Then we all sat down . Soon Shreya and Ina came up and said “ Please stand quietly for the National anthem” and Shreya did the stand up signal. The whole school sang, it sounded very beautiful we even did sign language. Suddenly to was my favourite part Ti Rauku , Ti Rauka is maori stick game which the warriors used this for hand-eye coordination at speed. Lucky enough Taylor, Dorina and I got to do it. We practised every morning tea and lunch and even sometimes during class . When it was the real day Taylor, Dorina and I was nervous, that’s why I dropped the stick!
Health with Grace
After all that stick work it was time for grace the public health.She came to talk to us about a Sore Throat and did you know that if you have a sore throat it could lead to rheumatic fever . So that’s why if you have a sore throat it is good to tell someone you know to take you to the sore throat clinic .There even might be some close to where you live. Grace was also telling us about some other things about sore throats.Right after she finish her talking she play a cool dance video that had students from different schools and it was all about sore throats. (Click here to see the video) After she finish she went and sat down and the whole school clapped.
Get New zealand Writing
Next Shreya and Ina were talking about get New Zealand writing.Get New Zealand writing is when you get this postcards and you get to write metaphor line on it from your metaphor poem ( That's we did). Also the day before we had our assembly we had got some postcards from a school in Greymouth and there school name is Barrytown school.There school is a mix of students from year 0 to 8 and there are only 22 kids in their school.(Crazy right)
The End
Written by Fehi Tupou
Document made by Miss Musa
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